I’m going to start sitting on my poetry a little longer. I do that with my short stories and chapters, but haven’t had as much experience editing the poems. I don’t want them to appear half-baked, which can happen when you feel inspired and write eight or so in a day (last Saturday).
Almost entirely re-written. I think the flow and meter have been improved, in addition to the clarity.
I think this one was already fairly strong, but I cleaned up a few structures and mechanics as well as introducing more concise language.
Gonna apologize now for the bi-polar tags section, these two poems are basically the opposite.